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Hello

I need to revise my personal statement.

Somebody help me for completion of essay.

this essay was not organized.

I want that you read my essay then please rewrite by your words about my life and my experience.

My essay has some problem. not organized and not create even boring. I want to change it to alive english.

i know how difficult revision. so If you can do rewrite I really want it.

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